i don’t know the original (assuming it’s out in the first place) but there are many things i like about this version, especially the appropriately dreamy off-kilter rhythms in the synth line.
you might consider making the kick drum in the first part just a bit more prominent.
also the vox got a touch quieter around 2:45ish, not sure if that was intentional but it caught my ear.
imho the structure fits the subject matter, so i’d leave that alone. lovely composition btw, whoever it is.
Thanks alot for the feedback - its much appreciated - good to get critique from many sources as its all a bit close at the moment - need to give it a few days off and come back to it. will post updates as they are bounced out.
Thanks again.
Love it! I listened to it (LOUD!!) on Yamaha HS80M (no sub)… in the beginning the bass sound is a bit too loud in my opinion… Around 2:07 the high pitched sounds were a bit harsh on my ears… it kinda made me squint… But other than that… awesome stuff dude!