Electronic world music

Hi,
Does any body hv a suggestion on this composition?
https://soundcloud.com/darman-merdeka/j … soundcloud
This is my first year with electronic environment.
I applied my experience as a percussionist to The Tempest,A4 and octatrack.
Made the rhythm mostly by live record & arrange then record 1 take with the whole composition.
Sorry for my english.

Cheers from indonesia.
Darman.

Hey man. I’m not a big fan of the repetitive melody in the first part. I like repetitive stuff, but the melody just isn’t very good in my opinion - but that’s obviously just personal opinion. :slight_smile: The percussive part is pretty awesome though, so well done!

Second part I like a lot more! That’s some properly groovy stuff. I really like the melodic thing that comes into this as well. Very playful and fun to listen to. Uplifting stuff.

Melody that comes in again at 3:23 isn’t really my cup of tea again, but just another personal opinion.

All in all I would say I’m a big fan of the percussive parts, but I think most of the melodies could do with some tuning or editing, as I think they sound a bit “cheap” or something that’s basically just plotted down without any thought or feeling behind it. I know that might sound a bit harsh, but again, it’s just my personal opinion, so don’t take it as criticism. :slight_smile:

Hi Daisuk,
Thank you for listening & i really apreciate your personal opinion.
For me it’s a well structured analysis & it’s one of a mirror how i can see my work :slight_smile: